D'vorahDavida
Yetzirah

Unfinished Business
Wed Apr 20 2005


Writer's group is tonight. How quickly two weeks has gone by!

Tonight we were supposed to write a 3 to5 hundred word first person account from our main character's point of view of a childhood memory. Since I do not yet relate to my main character in my oh so often refered to "novel in progress", I chose another character to write about.

I am beginning to question the whole novel concept to tell you the truth. At least for me. I hate unfinished business and though my novel has a beginning, a middle, and an end, it still needs to be re-written and cleaned up. But for some reason I am so completely STUCK with it. It's like a badly fallen cake. Sometimes I think I should just feed it to the shredder and be done with it! Or perhaps it feels more like a REALLY messy closet in my house that only I know about, and at unfortunate moments comes to mind and taunts me. . ."Clean me UP you lazy slattern!"

Ptu ptu, on it!

So here for your amusement, or annoyance as the case may be, is my Writer's Group submission for the evening:

No title, a secondary fictional character from the grab bag of unfinished business...

I dared not speak of my desires. I was ever afraid, even at a tender age to share the depth of my yearnings. I sensed no one would understand. The burden of it made me restless, prone to wander in the night, and there were days I feared it would unmake me.

I felt it first in a dream. I had fallen asleep in the carriage, or so I thought. The sound of the horse's harness jingled and creaked in the frosty air. My parents rode immersed in their own cares, and I, I had a waking dream.

The stars shone brilliant. But unlike any stars I had seen thus far in my four years of life. They were burning in a rainbow of fiery hues. . . fuchsia, chartreuse, blood red, electric blue and purple, each of a differing size. Though it was hard to tell for sure with the silhouettes of the stark tree limbs moving by, obscuring my astonished view.

I peeked to see if my mother noticed that the night was in alt. . . that angels were stirring the sky with powers...But no, she sat in silence, no doubt pondering what to order cook to make for the coming day.

The knowledge that I could not speak of the glory just outside the window filled me with sadness, or at least as much sadness as a four year old heart could hold.

Ever since that night, I have made my way by starlight. Bearing questions I knew could only be answered by the high council of Ma'kom, and everyone knows they only convene once in a millennium,emerging from their obscure abodes, unknown to all but each other. Surely my lifespan would not encompass such a rare event.

But the questions remained like burning letters, branding me forever an outcast. They made me overly sensitive to the yearnings of the Earth. I heard the cries of the grasses, the mourning of the trees, the songs of the flowers, and most of all the dirges of the autumn leaves. There were seasons I thought my heart would break when they spoke of the days before the exile. They too knew about the stars, and when they wept, I wept with them, without a soul to share my pain.

The children my age somehow knew that the tiny tempests they lived through meant little to me. I felt their scorn. At once dismissive and jealous, they could turn on me in an instant. Their rejection was a pale imitation of the sadness I already carried with me.

Yet as I grew older, they began to come to me in secret. Seeking council on some personal matter, they thought I would have answers, and sometimes I did. Though I did not find one among them who ever spoke of rainbow stars or weeping scarlet leaves. But I never turned anyone away. The starlight would have disapproved.




7 Comments
  • From:
    Supertrooper (Legacy)
    On:
    Wed Apr 20 2005
    Beautiful ..that transfixed me .....what a wonderful piece .

    I wish I were he .

    Hugs

    Linda x
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    InStitches (Legacy)
    On:
    Wed Apr 20 2005
    For a woman who, just yesterday, bemoaned her writing as less than scintillating (BTW I like that word too:), you sure wrote a lovely piece.

    As to the whole concept of having to finish everything we start; its bogus. Not every project needs completion. Some are started purely as a means of learning. They complete their usefulness by what they teach us.

    I have also noticed that sometimes I start something with one goal in mind and find along the way, that for some reason, it does not work; usually because it was too big and overwhelming. At such times I have been known to take the best parts and rework them into a smaller more managable piece; often finding the better design in the new work.
  • From:
    Sweetsummerbreeze (Legacy)
    On:
    Wed Apr 20 2005
    What a lovely piece. I wish I could write like that.
  • From:
    Ichandra (Legacy)
    On:
    Wed Apr 20 2005
    that is a beautiful entry it would be very neat to write from a childs point of view I guess if you think back for enough you can

    I exagerated yesterday when I said I felt like fainting and about yesterdays post I think your writing is often awesome right up to the present it takes talent to write with cuteness and your other entries I loved that rubber duckie one where the filing cabinet was floating in your tub and the baseball game these two stand out especially and when you said off with their heads about the tax form I loved it in terms of recent posts
    well enjoy that chocolate mon amie
    love
    ichandra
  • From:
    Pragmatist (Legacy)
    On:
    Wed Apr 20 2005
    What a beautiful story. Somewhere, deep down, I relate.

    Shalom
  • From:
    ImNotLisa (Legacy)
    On:
    Thu Apr 21 2005
    That is beautiful, truly beautiful.
  • From:
    Dreamerbooks2003 (Legacy)
    On:
    Thu Apr 21 2005
    Speachless
    You are good
    If you read my entry today.. Well, it is somewhat the same, but totally different.
    :P
    I am undone..
    love it
    Do not question the novel.. You are wonderful at it.
    Just write..
    Please!!